Before: Our children are our future, is an often quoted statement, which ideally refers to the fact that it is our children who have the power to initiate growth, progress and change in the times to come.
After: Our children are our future. This is an oft-quoted statement, which re-iterates that it is our children who have the power to initiate growth, progress and change in times to come.
Notes
a. Never place a comma before a verb. ‘Is’ - is a verb.
b. 'often quoted’ is usually written as 'oft-quoted’
c. Don’t use ‘ideally’ unnecessarily.
d. 'the times to come.’ to be changed to ‘times to come’. ‘The’ is a definite article. Please read up on the use of definite articles here: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/
e. Avoid constructions with ‘the fact that’ as much as possible.
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