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Sentence 18

Before
Instead, a surgeon can wear AR-enabled smart glasses through the surgery that brings up the most important information, thereby reducing the multitasking required and also significantly curbing errors.

After
Instead, they can wear AR-enabled smart glasses during the surgery that captures essential information, thereby reducing the multitasking required and also curbing errors. 

 Notes

  • In the document, the word 'surgeon' was used in the previous sentence. So, I've changed "a surgeon" in this sentence to "they"
  • Changed 'through' to 'during' since it conveys the meaning more accurately.
  • Changed "brings up" to "captures" since it is a better choice of word.
  • Changed "the most important" to "essential" since it is a better synonym.
  • Removed the adjective significantly, since it does not convey anything of value and is superfluous.


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