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Sentence 130

Before Sometimes even one motivated person can bring about a big change. After Sometimes, all it takes is one person to make a difference.  Notes Inserted a comma after 'sometimes'  Changed the sentence to pack in a punch.

Sentence 129

Before --> The challenges of geographically spread partners, distributed knowledge and expertise, language and cultural disparities, etc., means we’re partaking in an age where education systems are weeding out some age-old norms. At the same time, it’s getting harder to source, manage, motivate, and retain talent while controlling costs. After --> The challenges of managing geographically spread partners, distributed knowledge and expertise, language and cultural disparities are manifold. It’s getting harder to source, manage, motivate, and retain talent while controlling costs. Notes: The 'before' version is not parallel. It is rather unwieldy. So I cut out the phrases that didn't add to the sentence.

Sentence 128

Before The ascent of globalisation and technology are playing a fundamental role in rethinking every business role.  After The ascent of globalisation and technology is playing a fundamental role in redefining every business role.   Notes Changed 'are' to 'is' . Agreement of verb with subject.   Ascent is the subject. It is singular. A singular verb 'is' has to be used. 

Sentence 127

Before At Southern India Chamber of Commerce and Industry's session today, we discussed how Indian companies can invest in #Digitaltransformation; move to #cloud; bring #cybersecurity & #automation to manage post-#Brexit disruptions. An insightful discussion with @DHC_Chennai & others. After At Southern India Chamber of Commerce and Industry's session today, we discussed with @DHC_Chennai & others how Indian companies can invest in #Digitaltransformation, move to #cloud, ensure #cybersecurity, and drive #automation to manage post-#Brexit disruptions. Notes I made the sentence parallel - inserted a verb before the nouns. Replaced semicolons with commas. --> -->

Sentence 126

Before The objective of Mytrah’s 2017 Town Hall was to help employees understand the work done by various Mytrah departments.  After --> The objective of Mytrah’s 2017 Town Hall was to help employees understand the work done by various departments in the company.  Notes Rephrased because I didn't want to repeat Mytrah more than once.