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Sentence 81

Before: In such an environment, faced with new problems of data collection and integration, business continuity across an international market, and variances in the maturity of different markets, legacy systems and equipment will not help organisations to stay on the cutting-edge of change in a sustainable manner. After Legacy systems and equipment cannot handle problems of data collection and integration, business continuity across an international market, and variances in the maturity of different markets.  Notes: The 'before' version is too long and convoluted. It results in a dangling modifier.   I've cut out unnecessary verbiage: " to stay on the cutting-edge of change in a sustainable manner." The 'after' version is free from dangling modifiers and is precise.

Sentence 42

Before One of the complex and intense projects that Gutenberg has ever done in India, we were involved in developing strategy and plans, media and influencer mapping, media education and engagement, content strategy and development, strategic partnerships, media intelligence, media monitoring and on ground event support across 22 states. After  It was one of the most complex and intense projects that Gutenberg has ever done in India.  We were involved in developing strategy and plans, media and influencer mapping, media education and engagement, content strategy and development, strategic partnerships, media intelligence, media monitoring, and on-ground event support across 22 states Notes.  The 'before' version runs on. It is too long and unwieldy. It has no subject. It is a dangling modifier. I broke the sentence into two. Fixed the dangling modifier.