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 Before I am proud to announce the opening of our 23rd water unit for Public use in Bidadi. This is part of Toyota's plans to ensure that the public can access clean water. This hi-tech water unit can benefit 8000 population and is a big step towards reducing water-borne diseases. After   I am proud to announce the opening of our 23rd water unit for public use in Bidadi. The facility underlines Toyota's commitment to ensuring that the public has access to clean water. The hi-tech water unit can benefit 8000 citizens and is a big step in combating water-borne diseases. Notes: 'Public' does not require a capital P. '8000 population' is incorrect usage. Changed it to 8000 citizens. #worchoice Starting a sentence with "This" is avoidable since the antecedent is unclear.

 Before @jk_rowling is truly a magician! After @jk_rowling truly creates magic! Notes: The 'after' version indicates that her work is magic while the 'before' version makes it sound like she is a professional magician. #word choice.

Before This chess whizz will be someone to look out for! After This chess wiz will be someone to look out for! Notes: Whizz vs. wiz Click on each word to know the difference in usage.

Before Through regular events in partnership with NGOs, internal awareness campaigns and by using demand-side management approaches, we strive to encourage a positive environmental action amongst our employees. After Through regular events in partnership with NGOs, internal awareness campaigns, and by using demand-side management approaches, we strive to encourage a decisive environmental action amongst our employees. Comments Introduced a serial comma before 'and' since we use The Chicago Manual of Style(CMOS) for this client. You can learn more about the use of the serial comma according to CMOS here. Changed #positive to #decisive because it is a better choice of word.

Before Business responsibility at ABC Corp. ingrains the spectrum of the nine principles of the National Voluntary Guidelines issued by the Ministry of Corporate Affairs, Government of India,  along with their key elements.  After Business responsibility at ABC Corp. encapsulates the spectrum of the nine principles of the National Voluntary Guidelines issued by the Ministry of Corporate Affairs, Government of India,  along with their key elements.  Notes. Ingrains   vs. encapsulates #wordchoice

Before: A revelation of this kind surely makes me wonder about how old our history goes and how our stories and culture is embedded in the soil and nature around us. After: A revelation of this kind makes me marvel at history. It's remarkable how the story of our culture is told by the soil and nature around us. Notes and comments:  Avoid the word 'surely' in a sentence. It adds little and weakens the sentence. You don't wonder "about"  Replaced "wonder about" with "marvel" #wordchoice 'How old our history goes' - Our history is not going anywhere.  Broke the 'before' version into two sentences. Stories and culture cannot be "embedded" in the soil. Only gems can be embedded. #wordchoice In the before version, it says 'how our stories and culture is'  Stories and culture are 2 different things. A plural has to be used, not "is".

Headline Before - A sneak peak into life in Pyeongchang beyond the #Winter Olympics. After- A sneak peek into life in  Pyeongchang beyond the #Winter Olympics Notes #wordchoice Peak vs. peek