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Sentence 121

Before But it’s not just organizations such as Facebook, Starbucks and Amazon that are riding this new wave to enhance customer experiences, drive an emotional resonance with its global brands, and build loyal customer relationships. After But it’s not just organizations such as Facebook, Starbucks, and Amazon that are riding this wave to enhance customer experiences, strike an emotional chord with their global brands and build loyal customer relationships.  Notes: Inserted serial comma before 'and Amazon' since we follow the serial comma for US English as a style issue. You can't "drive an emotional resonance". Changed it to "strike an emotional chord" - #phrasechoice Changed "with its global brands" to "with their global brands" since there are several brands being discussed.

Sentence 117

Before The increase in mobile gaming is running parallel to India’s rise in smartphone adoption, which is set to have 530 million smartphone users this year. Explain the opportunity that lies for you in India. After The increase in mobile gaming is keeping pace with India’s rise in smartphone adoption, which is set to have  530 million smartphone  users this year. What are your plans for the Indian market? Notes: Running parallel to vs. keeping pace with #phrasechoice