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Sentence 32

Before:

AI to The Rescue: The Technologies Healthcare Enterprises Can Deploy to Spot and Stop the Spread of Fake Health News
After
AI to the Rescue: How Healthcare Enterprises Can Check the Spread of Fake Health News through Technologies

Notes:
  • This time, I'm talking about a headline.
  • Do not capitalize the definite article( the)
  • "Spot and stop" is a tongue twister. So, I've changed it to "Check" Words should roll off the tongue, not stumble off them.
  • Here's a note from the Internet about the use of 'technology' versus 'technologies', where they advocate the use of 'technologies'. ( Just FYI)



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