Before
AB Corp's digital advertising increased the e-commerce company’s sale figure by X and per user session time increased by two times, giving an average sale of X.
After:
AB Corp's digital advertising increased the sales figures of the e-commerce company by X and the per-user session time by double, resulting in an average sale of Y.
Notes:
Do not use the possessive of 'company'. It is a non-living thing, although it may be argued that a company is made of its people:) For the sake of grammar, it is a non-living thing.
Replaced 'by two times' to 'by double' since it sounds better.
You don't 'give' an average. # word choice.
AB Corp's digital advertising increased the e-commerce company’s sale figure by X and per user session time increased by two times, giving an average sale of X.
After:
AB Corp's digital advertising increased the sales figures of the e-commerce company by X and the per-user session time by double, resulting in an average sale of Y.
Notes:
Do not use the possessive of 'company'. It is a non-living thing, although it may be argued that a company is made of its people:) For the sake of grammar, it is a non-living thing.
Replaced 'by two times' to 'by double' since it sounds better.
You don't 'give' an average. # word choice.
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