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Sentence 35

Before:
Fake news rose to notorious fame during the 2016 U.S. presidential elections.

After:
Fake news achieved notoriety during the 2016 U.S. presidential elections. 

 Note:
Notorious fame is an oxymoron. So I rephrased it.

 Here's the definition of 'oxymoron' according to m-w.com

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