Before:
From helping foreign clients tell their stories in India to
help Indian businesses take their business to a global scale, the team has a
successful record.
After:
From helping foreign clients tell their stories in India to enabling
Indian entrepreneurs to take their business to a global scale, the team has a
successful record.
Notes:
'Help' was used twice, so replaced with enabling. #word choice.
Also 'enabling' (-ing verb) to keep the parallel construction of 'helping' used earlier intact.
businesses vs. entrepreneurs - word choice.
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