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Sentence 100

Before
 Does plastic create more waste than convenience?

 After
Does plastic create more waste than it is worth?
Comment
The 'before' sentence has the comparison wrong. It is asking whether plastic creates more waste than convenience does, which makes no sense.

 Changed it to 'more waste than it is worth' to bring out the intended meaning.
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