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Sentence 95

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Totally agree with you @imVkohli this was indeed a magnificent catch, last night! And I think all of us saw the wonders of real life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 last night.

After
Totally agree with you @imVkohli. This was the catch of the match! And we all saw real-life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 in action last night.

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"Saw the wonders of real life Spiderman" sounds odd. Rephrased it to "And we all saw real-life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 in action last night."

'Real life Spiderman' is hyphenated since 'real-life' is an adjective modifying the noun Spiderman.

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