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As technology changes and businesses evolve, a company's insurance needs will adapt too. The future looks quite interesting - https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/315418

 After
As new technologies with unknown risks and outcomes emerge, a company's insurance needs will also change. The future looks quite interesting. https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/315418

 Changed to the 'after' version in keeping with the content in the link. 
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