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Sentence 123


Before
Manufacturers have really improved the opportunity to build a quicker product to market with very little down time because the M2M capability allows for communication to be real-time and predicts things that may fail, hence do the corrected action even before the product has failed.

After
Manufacturers have facilitated a quicker product to market with very little down time because the M2M capability allows for communication to be real-time and predicts things that may fail and suggests countermeasures.

Notes:
"Have really improved the opportunity to build" has been replaced with "facilitated" . #wordchoice
" hence do the corrected action even before the product has failed." has been replaced with "and suggests countermeasures." since it conveys the intended meaning while being grammatically correct.



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