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Sentence 125

Before
“We are ecstatic about partnering with DH. The S media Group stands at the brink of a significant leap forward as it has been making earnest attempts at expanding its footprint to access audiences across various demographics, geographies and distribution technologies in its heartland in the last few years.

After
“We are ecstatic about partnering with DH. The S Media Group is poised to take a significant leap forward as it has been making earnest attempts at expanding its footprint to access audiences across various demographics, geographies and distribution technologies in its heartland in the last few years. 

 Notes:
Changed "at the brink of a significant leap forward" to  "is poised to take a significant leap forward" since it conveys the intended meaning while being grammatically correct.

 S media Group has been changed to S Media Group. #capitalization.

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