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Sentence 128

Before
The ascent of globalisation and technology are playing a fundamental role in rethinking every business role. 

After
The ascent of globalisation and technology is playing a fundamental role in redefining every business role.  

 Notes
Changed 'are' to 'is' .

 Agreement of verb with subject. 

 Ascent is the subject. It is singular. A singular verb 'is' has to be used. 

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