Before
The longer I work within the marketing communications industry, I increasingly see an industry asking the wrong questions – in both good and bad ways.
After
The longer I work within the marketing communications industry, I increasingly see an industry asking the wrong questions – in both good and bad ways.
After
The longer I work in marketing communications, the more I see an industry asking the wrong questions – in both good and bad ways.
Notes:
The 'Before' version is not parallel in construction.
I've made the sentence parallel.
The longer....the more....
Within vs in - Word choice
Removed 'industry' the first time it occurred since it is repeatedly used.
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