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As it continues its spread, advertising agencies can leverage the advantage of ad tech's opportunities and develop better integrated connected across all channels and more data sharing.
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Advertising agencies can leverage ad tech's opportunities and develop better integration across all channels with more data sharing.
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As it continues its spread, advertising agencies can leverage the advantage of ad tech's opportunities and develop better integrated connected across all channels and more data sharing.
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Advertising agencies can leverage ad tech's opportunities and develop better integration across all channels with more data sharing.
Notes and comments:
- The sentence starts off with singular - "As it continues its spread", but moves on to plural "advertising agencies".
- I have done away with the initial phrase since it adds little value.
- You don't 'leverage the advantage'. 'Leverage' itself means to 'capitalize on'.
- 'develop better integrated connected' makes no sense. Have rephrased to ' develop better integration across'
- Replaced 'and' with 'with' since it is the right preposition to use.
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