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Sentence 120



--> --> BeforeToday, healthcare providers have to push the boundaries to stay ahead of the curve[AL1] . [AL2] 




 [AL1]This is a mixed metaphor. Please rephrase.


 [AL2]‘To consistently push’ is a split infinitive. So have removed 'consistently.

Notes:

Mixed metaphors are defined here.

After
Today, healthcare providers have to try harder to stay ahead.


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