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Sentence 67

Before ABC's team comprises of industry stalwarts who have vast experience in various aspects of content creation across multiple platforms After ABC's team comprises industry stalwarts who have experience in various aspects of content creation across multiple platforms. Notes: Do not use 'of' after comprises.

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