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Sentence 126

Before
The objective of Mytrah’s 2017 Town Hall was to help employees understand the work done by various Mytrah departments. 

 After
--> The objective of Mytrah’s 2017 Town Hall was to help employees understand the work done by various departments in the company. 
 Notes
Rephrased because I didn't want to repeat Mytrah more than once. 

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