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Before  Does plastic create more waste than convenience? After Does plastic create more waste than it is worth? Comment The 'before' sentence has the comparison wrong. It is asking whether plastic creates more waste than convenience does, which makes no sense. Changed it to 'more waste than it is worth' to bring out the intended meaning.

Before Next time I bite into an #alphonso mango I am going to remind myself the nameless labourers who toil to give us a taste of the sweetest fruits on earth. After Next time I bite into an #alphonso mango, I am going to mentally thank the 'aam aadmi' who ensures these sweet fruits reach me. Comments The article was about security guards who guard mangoes, not labourers who toil in the farm. nameless labourers doesn't make much sense  since factually, labourers do have names.  sweetest fruits is a superlative. not suitable since it is not proven that mango is the sweetest. 'aam aadmi' is a pun on mango, so used that.

Before Led by Gopichand himself, Ramesh Nagapuri Dronacharya awardee, senior coach from the Sports Authority of India (SAI), takes care of the daily operations. After Led by Gopichand,  Ramesh Nagapuri, a Dronacharya awardee and senior coach from the Sports Authority of India (SAI), takes care of the daily operations. Comments himself is unnecessary Ramesh Nagapuri is a Dronacharya awardee so the comma is necessary The indefinite article 'a' is required before 'Dronacharya awardee' The after sentence means that Ramesh Nagapuri is a Dronacharya awardee as well as a senior coach from SAI. The question/comment to the writer was ' How many people are you talking about?   Please check if this is what you mean.'

Before Medical conditions could include Polycystic Ovarian Syndrome (PCOS), sexually transmitted infections (STIs), endometrial tuberculosis in women, and in men could be due to hormonal imbalances, varicocele, undescended testicles, or even certain previous surgeries.  After In women, medical conditions could include Polycystic Ovarian Syndrome (PCOS), sexually transmitted infections (STIs) and endometrial tuberculosis. In men, infertility could be due to hormonal imbalances, varicocele, undescended testicles, or even certain previous surgeries. Comments Split it into two shorter sentences for brevity and clarity Started with 'In women' to make it parallel to the second sentence that starts with 'In men'.

Before   Safety as always been our first and foremost tenant and with the #ToyotaYaris, we pushed the limits to bring you the best. Share stories of your #Yaris experience.  After Safety has always been our first and foremost tenet and with the #ToyotaYaris, we have raised the bar to bring you the best. Share stories of your #Yaris experience.  Comments: Changed 'Safety as' to 'Safety has' and fixed the typo. Changed 'tenant' to tenet '. #wordchoice Changed ' we pushed the limits to bring you the best.  ' to 'we have raised the bar to bring you the best.' Since the earlier part of the sentence has "has always', we need to say 'have raised the bar...' in the second part of the sentence. The commonly used idiom is ' pushed the envelope ' not 'pushed the limits'. #Idiomchoice - raised the bar  

Before Totally agree with you @imVkohli this was indeed a magnificent catch, last night! And I think all of us saw the wonders of real life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 last night. After Totally agree with you @imVkohli. This was the catch of the match! And we all saw real-life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 in action last night. Comments "Saw the wonders of real life Spiderman" sounds odd. Rephrased it to " And we all saw real-life #Spiderman @abdevilliers17 in action last night." 'Real life Spiderman' is hyphenated since 'real-life' is an adjective modifying the noun Spiderman.

Before The driving force behind this is that ad tech is slowly becoming sophisticated due to the evolving technologies like Artificial Intelligence (AI), machine learning (ML), and programmatic advertisement buying. After The driving force behind this exponential growth is evolving technologies in ad tech.  Artificial Intelligence (AI), machine learning (ML), and programmatic advertisement buying combine to form the essential core of digital advertising today.  Comments 'This' in the before version is an unclear antecedent.  In the after version, I have added the words exponential growth to clarify what "this" refers to. I have split the long sentence into two sentences for clarity of thought.